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#61 Post by Donnellson86 »

So the prodigal writer has returned. It's good to see ya writing again, keep up the good work.
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Thanks Don, glad to see you're still reading. Feels good to be back. I do hope things are well with you and thanks for reading man.
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Yes, I took a bit of an extended break if you will :|
But I'm back, thanks for reading Fawkes, and I do plan on keeping it up and not letting it die again. See ya around.
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#64 Post by Bellhead »

Good thing your birthday came around or I never would have found this. So glad I did.

I do have a question, though. The description of Ron when we first see him is rather extensive, but not as much is said for Isabell. What is her fur color? I'm having a hard time picturing her without it.

Love the story, hope to see more of it soon.
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#65 Post by kevin »

Honestly, I left her rather vague because I wanted people to form their own image of her, especially since people have different images come to mind when they hear "female fox Keidran". It was my way of providing a character while not limiting people's imagination. However, if you really wanna know, I for one imagine a rather average looking fox Keidran woman, solid brown shoulder length hair, blue eyes, a face that shows more defiance than submission, almost like Laura only with a completely different demeanor. I hope this helps.

Thanks for reading, glad you like it Bellhead.
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#66 Post by Jonesy »

Spent a portion of the afternoon reading this, and might I just say, I really enjoyed it. I'm doing my own story of interspecies love, and it's fascinating to see a different approach to how it takes place. I hope you intend to continue with the story.
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Chapter 11 Part 1

Lunch was eaten, the children went to their room to work on their writing, and Ron went to work in his study. Isabell, intending to work on her homework as well, was finishing up cleaning from lunch. She felt eyes on her and turned around to find William standing behind her with an uncertain look on his face. Concerned, she knelt and asked, “What is it, buddy?”

William found his courage and said, “Well, it’s just.... I’ve been wanting to ask you-”

The young lad felt unsure of himself and cut himself off, eying the floor wearily. Isabell placed a hand on his shoulder and encouraged him, “Go on, it’s alright.”

William once again found his courage, looked Isabell in her eyes, and continued, “Well... I’m not stupid, I know I’m different from Dad and Kate, and that you’re like me.”

“Yeah?” replied Isabell, a look of apprehensive curiosity on her face.

“Yeah...” William continued, again eying the floor for a second before returning to Isabell’s eyes. “And, well, what are we exactly? Why are we different from them? Why do the others like us look so sad? And-and....” Uncertainty stopped the boy once again, his eyes looking meekly at the floor.

“Oh boy...” Isabell thought as she placed both hands on William. His gaze returned to her own. She attempted to reassure and calm the boy, “Hey-hey-hey, it’s okay, buddy.” With a gentle voice, she asked, “What brought all this on anyway?”

“I’ve been wanting to ask for a while, before you even came, but was afraid to ask Dad” Stated young William. “I thought I could try asking you, though.”

Isabell smiled softly for William, gave him a hug, then looked him in the eye again and told him “I appreciate you trusting me like that, really, I do. But you don’t have to be afraid of your dad, you can talk to him about anything. He’s also the best person to ask about that, it’s not really my place to do so”

William looked down at his feet, feeling defeated.

Isabell lifted his head back up and added “Hey, tell you what, once you’re ready, we can talk to your dad together, so that way you have a friend there to help you, okay?”

William nodded; the idea made him feel more at ease. Isabell gave him a hug, he returned it with firmness, and she sent him off to continue his homework as she finished her own chores.

Isabell struggled with her homework, but she did feel a growing sense of confidence in her work. The letters already looked more like how Ron writes them, and pride swelled within her. It still felt quite odd, seeing her own name written out before her. Is that how it is spelled? She attempted to recall how it appeared in documents pertaining to her such as bills of sale, wishing to mentally compare, but could not quite do so.

Once completed and largely satisfied with her work, Isabell then went to contemplating what William had asked her earlier. Those were sensible questions for him to ask, and ones that Ron no doubt knew he would have to answer one day. Still, it would be somewhat awkward to do so, especially in explaining what slaves are and that, technically, William is one as well. Not exactly a conversation any parent wants to have, she was sure of that.

Isabell went to Ron’s study and knocked on his door. He called for her to enter, and she did so, being met with the familiar sight of Ron hard at work at his desk, with books and paperwork strewn about. He always was a bit of a messy worker. Ron looked up from his work, “What’s up?”

“I just wanted to tell you my homework is done and that it’s ready for review if you wish to see it” Isbell replied.

“Oh, that’s good,” said Ron, “but I’ll review it along with the kids’ before dinner.”

“Okay....” Isabell trailed off.

“Is there something else?” asked Ron, sensing that there was more Isabell wanted to talk about.

“Yeah,” started Isabell, somewhat unsure of how to proceed, “it’s William.”

“Did he do something wrong?” asked Ron, curious about the issue.

“No, it’s just...” Isabell gathered her thoughts for a moment, “he came to me earlier asking about what we are, why we’re different, stuff like that.”

“Oh...” Ron looked away from Isabell for a moment, thinking on what she had told him. He did indeed anticipate such questions and dreaded having to answer them. He owed William answers, though, and does want to be honest with the boy, though in a child-appropriate kind of way. “What did you tell him?” asked Ron, his eyes back on Isabell.

“I just told him that those are all questions best suited for you and that when he’s ready I’d sit in with you two as he asked you himself” replied Isabell.

“Good, thank you,” Ron said, appreciating her desire to respect his role as a parent.

“You’re welcome,” Isabell said, “I just thought I’d let you know so you can prepare yourself for that whole conversation, whenever that may be.”

“Well,” started Ron, “I really do appreciate it.”

With that, Ron returned to his work, and Isabell left the room to let him work in what peace he could find after being told that news. As for Isabell, she still had some chores she could attend to, such as mending some of the children’s clothes and tending to the garden. She checked on the kids and found that they, too, had just finished their homework. She enlisted their help for the garden, both to help her out as well as to bond with the kids. Besides, the sun had come out and the warmth it provided would be very much appreciated.


In town, things were largely normal. People went about their business, some feeling a tad bit hungover from the previous night’s festivities. At the Templar lodge, however, a meeting was taking place. Some men sat at a table in the central meeting room, sipping on hot tea poured by Boris and talking amongst themselves. Finally, the head Templar for the lodge entered the room. All rose, “Be seated, gentlemen” he said, putting a hand up; they did so.

“Gentlemen,” the Templar began as he walked over to his seat, stood behind his chair, but remained standing, “I called you here to discuss a simple matter. A young man in our town is acting rather.... unreasonably.”

The men nod knowingly, understanding who it was that he was referring to.

“Now, given that he works for an influential person for this province and esteemed member of this council,” the Templar gestured to one of their own, mister Hughes, “is a well-regarded member of the community, and that he has not shown explicitly treasonous or immoral behavior, I move that he but put under continuous observation and given a warning, for now.”

The other men nod in agreement, with Hughes adding “I’ll help put forth funds for these spies and observe him more thoroughly myself when at his home.”

“Thank you, my dear Nathanial” replied the Templar. “If there are no other comments to add or issues of concern, this meeting is adjourned, gentlemen.”

The men all rise, bow respectfully to the head of their organization, finish their drinks, and make their way back out to the cold day to return to their business. After they all had cleared out, the Templar hailed over Boris, who dutifully walked over. “Boris, fetch me my cloak and boots. I think I’ll take a stroll” the Templar commands. Boris bowed and walked out to gather his master’s things, knowing full well where he intended to go.


At the Davis home, the chores were complete, Ron had finished his work for the day, and now it was time to make dinner, after which, the homework would be reviewed. The whole family worked together on making dinner, with William occasionally looking to Isabell for reassurance about their previous conversation. Each time, Isabell did her best to smile and convey quiet confidence to young William. As for Kate, well, she loved being allowed to help cook.

The simple meal was set at the table, but before eating, Ron reviewed the homework Isabell and the kids had turned in. While Isabell may have struggled the most initially, she had made quick progress, as expected of an eager mind wishing to learn. Ron, satisfied, congratulated them all on their hard work. The pupils, Isabell in particular, felt a strong sense of pride within themselves. Now, they readied themselves to eat together, but as the made-up plates, a knock came from the front door.

Thank you to anyone who bothered to read this. To the mods, I hope this post is okay. To anyone curious about the huge gap, well, certain life events and behavioral health issues got in the way. I won't go into detail here, if interested ask, but I have recently regained my passion for writing, and would very much like to start that up again.
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Re: The Adoptive Father: Chapter 11 Part 1 now up

#68 Post by Bellhead »

I'm sure the necro will be fine, since it's a continuation of your own story. And I, for one, am very glad you did. I really liked this story, and I might just have to make an effort to reread it from the beginning again. That said...

I have mixed feelings about the Templar in this. I feel they were accurately written, and behave according to the ideals that people like them would uphold. And because of that, I don't like them. So nice job with that; creating a villain that can be hated without being excessively evil is not something that just anyone can do. It feels quite real.

And I do wonder if Ron will ever bring up Isabell sneaking into his bed. I kinda hope he's gotten used to her enough that having her there for warmth on cold nights would not be too stressful for him, but I can also imagine the emotional and social repercussions of making that a regular thing. And did the kids notice? With the Templar observing so closely from here on out, things are sure to get a lot more complicated...

Still, can't wait to read more. Just try not to take 8 years this time. :)
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#69 Post by kevin »

Thank you for your feedback, Bellhead. I certainly have tried my best to make the Templar seem evil in a very human way as opposed to cartoonish. I'm glad you appreciate that effort.

I also want to thank you, and anyone else who reads and comments, for helping inspire me to pick up writing again. Not just writing this, either, but other projects I had put on hold. Reading back through this thread some time ago, seeing people's feedback, made me miss writing more than I already had. Once again, thank you.

Please stay tuned, but not for several years again.
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#70 Post by Elemental Templar »

Hey Kevin, I just wanted to say (albeit this is somewhat late) welcome back and thank you. I honestly didn't think I'd see any future updates from this story, so this was a welcome surprise.

This was actual first Twokinds Fan-fic I ever read, even before I officially joined the forums; I just thought it had the right balance of wholesomeness, comedy, and tragedy all beautifully bundled up with some great writing. And I'm also pleased to see you haven't lost your touch.

I myself am somewhat a struggling author (as in, I have a mountain of ideas that I'd like to get on a page; but for can't get motivated enough to do so), and after seeing you come back after so long, I feel like it's finally time to see what I can do with prose.

I hope you're doing well, and I'll happily wait as long as it's needed to see more of The Adoptive Father.

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#71 Post by kevin »

Well, thank you, Elemental Templar. That makes me quite happy to read. I'm so glad that people still enjoy this and remember it fondly. It was honestly looking back on the story and how people responded to it that helped motivate me to get back to writing. I'm no great writer by any means, but I do enjoy getting my ideas out there and bringing what happiness I can to people.

As for wanting to be a writer yourself, I totally understand what you mean. I also have a lot of story ideas that bounce around in my head, some get test written, and few have been presented to be read by others. I am glad I can potentially inspire you. All you can do is try when you feel the motivation and see where things go. I myself typically put on some easy-listening music (instrumental only being my favorite for this) and just get to work. The more you write, the more motivation you can feel and the more experience you'll gain to help you improve.

With all sincerity, thank you, truly, to those of you who have read, are still reading, and who provide feedback of any kind. I am working on the next portion that will be up within this decade (too soon? |D ), so please stay tuned.
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