This is true. I can't remember if we've seen anyone else eating non-meat in comic... But I digress.Yastreb wrote: ↑Wed Oct 07, 2020 10:18 amTechnic[Bot] wrote: ↑Tue Oct 06, 2020 11:49 pm Also I did not know wolves, and big cats for that matter, can't digest starches. The more you know!I always assumed that it was just feline Keidran, while canine types are omnivorous like their our world counterparts. Sythe even eats pizza in the comic.
Silverlocks 11 [COMPLETED][DEFINITELY NSFW]
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And, finally, chapter 10 - The Aftermath.
It's been a relatively long journey, but it was fun. I have an idea for another long series, but it's looking to be more frequent, short updates. None of this chapter crap. But before then I just want to write some more short stories.
Anyways, thanks to everyone who read it and gave some feedback, it sucked less because of you guys.
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Anyways, thanks to everyone who read it and gave some feedback, it sucked less because of you guys.
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Thanks for sharing this with us! Very Nice as usual. you really improved a lot over very little time
My only issue is the tone. The first part is very cute and sweet and then we jump straight to burning down the local brothel. The Transition is a bit harsh.
Now for my customary tangential comments:
Really not sure the french/catalan sounding brothel has a sustainable business model. They seem to kill their captives faster than they can make money out of them. Also they must have an incredible supply chain considering they keep replacing them almost as fast as they are killing them.
My only issue is the tone. The first part is very cute and sweet and then we jump straight to burning down the local brothel. The Transition is a bit harsh.
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Really not sure the french/catalan sounding brothel has a sustainable business model. They seem to kill their captives faster than they can make money out of them. Also they must have an incredible supply chain considering they keep replacing them almost as fast as they are killing them.
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Yeah I get that. I was planning on breaking this chapter into 2 to smooth the transition but I just wanted to finish it. And yeah the supply chain must be great. Suspension of reality is what it’s about I guess but that is a pretty big plot hole.Technic[Bot] wrote: ↑Thu Oct 22, 2020 3:46 am Thanks for sharing this with us! Very Nice as usual. you really improved a lot over very little time
My only issue is the tone. The first part is very cute and sweet and then we jump straight to burning down the local brothel. The Transition is a bit harsh.
Now for my customary tangential comments:
Really not sure the french/catalan sounding brothel has a sustainable business model. They seem to kill their captives faster than they can make money out of them. Also they must have an incredible supply chain considering they keep replacing them almost as fast as they are killing them.
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You could also posted them as separate chapters even if they said the exactly same thing.
But Please do not take my comments to seriously I like to obsess over meaningless details that nobody really cares. A personality quirk really.
But Please do not take my comments to seriously I like to obsess over meaningless details that nobody really cares. A personality quirk really.
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haha no problem it all helps!Technic[Bot] wrote: ↑Fri Oct 23, 2020 2:50 am You could also posted them as separate chapters even if they said the exactly same thing.
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Sorry it took me so long to read this. I've had life crap to deal with, and I couldn't really spend the time to read it through properly.
This was quite a nice resolution to everything that happened up to this point. And as far as the change in pace with Keith and Natani raining holy hell down on that brothel, I think it was right on, honestly. That scene was disturbing enough the first time, so there was just enough of a reference to remind us of that without bringing the whole thing back into the spotlight. Also keep in mind, Technic, that Natani is a trained assassin, and Keith is a trained military soldier, both of whom have experience killing and infiltrating. Saying "all hell broke loose" is pretty much all you need to know.
Natani went in with the mindset of justice and righteous fury, which Keith didn't have since he wasn't there, but he knew how much it meant to Natani and wasn't about to leave him to battle his demons alone. There are several stories and series where the main characters head into battle, into the mouth of hell, etc., and they usually begin with something simple like that. Something like, "You coming, or what?" "Might as well" *screen fades out with heroes facing a never-ending horde*
The end of Angel was like that.I don't see this as that far off. We know what's going to happen, one way or the other, and we know the main characters in-scene will be fighting together as one, and they'll be fighting for what they believe in. In short, it ties up loose ends, with a tight character bond, fighting an enemy of (essentially) pure evil. It was a fight we all wanted, after what we saw in there, and I think "all hell broke loose" is like saying, "everything elsewhere is wrapped up and happy, and the darkness is about to be destroyed, but it's still a happy time".
That was the best end that could have had, in my opinion. It worked well, nicely done.
This was quite a nice resolution to everything that happened up to this point. And as far as the change in pace with Keith and Natani raining holy hell down on that brothel, I think it was right on, honestly. That scene was disturbing enough the first time, so there was just enough of a reference to remind us of that without bringing the whole thing back into the spotlight. Also keep in mind, Technic, that Natani is a trained assassin, and Keith is a trained military soldier, both of whom have experience killing and infiltrating. Saying "all hell broke loose" is pretty much all you need to know.
Natani went in with the mindset of justice and righteous fury, which Keith didn't have since he wasn't there, but he knew how much it meant to Natani and wasn't about to leave him to battle his demons alone. There are several stories and series where the main characters head into battle, into the mouth of hell, etc., and they usually begin with something simple like that. Something like, "You coming, or what?" "Might as well" *screen fades out with heroes facing a never-ending horde*
The end of Angel was like that.
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That was the best end that could have had, in my opinion. It worked well, nicely done.
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Oof sucks to hear you've got crap (that sounds weird), but thanks for taking the time to read this all and leave feedback.Bellhead wrote: ↑Mon Oct 26, 2020 1:45 am Sorry it took me so long to read this. I've had life crap to deal with, and I couldn't really spend the time to read it through properly.
This was quite a nice resolution to everything that happened up to this point. And as far as the change in pace with Keith and Natani raining holy hell down on that brothel, I think it was right on, honestly. That scene was disturbing enough the first time, so there was just enough of a reference to remind us of that without bringing the whole thing back into the spotlight. Also keep in mind, Technic, that Natani is a trained assassin, and Keith is a trained military soldier, both of whom have experience killing and infiltrating. Saying "all hell broke loose" is pretty much all you need to know.
Natani went in with the mindset of justice and righteous fury, which Keith didn't have since he wasn't there, but he knew how much it meant to Natani and wasn't about to leave him to battle his demons alone. There are several stories and series where the main characters head into battle, into the mouth of hell, etc., and they usually begin with something simple like that. Something like, "You coming, or what?" "Might as well" *screen fades out with heroes facing a never-ending horde*
We know what's going to happen, one way or the other, and we know the main characters in-scene will be fighting together as one, and they'll be fighting for what they believe in. In short, it ties up loose ends, with a tight character bond, fighting an enemy of (essentially) pure evil. It was a fight we all wanted, after what we saw in there, and I think "all hell broke loose" is like saying, "everything elsewhere is wrapped up and happy, and the darkness is about to be destroyed, but it's still a happy time".
That was the best end that could have had, in my opinion. It worked well, nicely done.
You’re welcome.
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