Human & Lupusad - Of Men and Wolves [Mature Content]

[Jonesy]

I was beginning to wonder if anybody noticed.

I was originally going to say something about shipping them, but... no. This isn't even a ship, they're totally a thing Do you think he'll be introduced earlier if you rewrite?

Oh, and, somewhat paradoxically, I like that Halil is pretty racist toward the lupusad. I don't have the story in active memory, so I can't remember if it's been an issue, but the good guy / bad guy divide shouldn't be too pat. And I'd think that sooner or later someone is going to have to figure out how to be pro-lupusad and pro-human at the same time.

I don't think I'll be introducing him earlier, no. Might mention him, but won't have him crop up until now.

Also, I haven't really explored it outside of the (vastly outdated and largely redundant) lore document, but Mironorans are generally xenophobic. It must say a lot if Halil is one of the more progressive ones since he's moved to Albevion and is alright with the local humans. But lupusad... not so much.

Man, I really messed up quite a few parts on this one. Hopefully, once I'm done with university, I'll be able to focus on it a bit more.

If you want to catch typos, read it out loud. It takes a good bit of time, but it works really well for most people, myself included. And you can find some other types of problems that way, too. There's something about doing it that forces the text to go all the way through language processing.


Oh, and thanks for the chapter, of course! 10k words, too. That's novelette-sized in itself, and I think you're nearing... about 400 pages if this were a paperback? This is going to be too big for traditional publishing

I'll have to remember that. Might get time-consuming if I keep doing long chapters, but it's worth a try.

[Warrl]

Oh, and thanks for the chapter, of course! 10k words, too. That's novelette-sized in itself, and I think you're nearing... about 400 pages if this were a paperback? This is going to be too big for traditional publishing

I'll have to remember that. Might get time-consuming if I keep doing long chapters, but it's worth a try.

According to ebook-publishing site Smashwords, being long is pretty much the opposite of a problem... if, of course, the story is well-written.

[amenon]

Oh, and thanks for the chapter, of course! 10k words, too. That's novelette-sized in itself, and I think you're nearing... about 400 pages if this were a paperback? This is going to be too big for traditional publishing

According to ebook-publishing site Smashwords, being long is pretty much the opposite of a problem... if, of course, the story is well-written.

I did specifically say 'traditional publishing'

[dragonfriend7738]

I just finished catching up to the current chapter, and I have to admit that I'm in love with the story. Thank you for sharing it, and I'm eagerly looking forward to future installations.

[Jonesy]

I just finished catching up to the current chapter, and I have to admit that I'm in love with the story. Thank you for sharing it, and I'm eagerly looking forward to future installations.

Glad you're enjoying it! And you're just in time, too; the next chapter's being proofread and should be up within a week or so, depending on how busy my proofreaders are.

[Jonesy]

As planned, the time has finally come to take the story down for now, in preparation for future publishing of the re-written version. It's a pretty bittersweet moment; I've got a lot of great memories about uploading chapters and eagerly anticipating people's responses. I'd like to thank you all for following the story all these years, and I'm glad you enjoyed it so much. I'll be keeping the thread itself up for now in order to keep you all updated on where H&L goes from here.​

[AndreRhineDavis]

awesome, as usual!

Also:
"A bowl was filled with… something, and Kasa tenderly lifted it to Nituna’s lips for her to drink from it, before she did the same to him."
*Rakai ?

[Jonesy]

awesome, as usual!

Also:
"A bowl was filled with… something, and Kasa tenderly lifted it to Nituna’s lips for her to drink from it, before she did the same to him."
*Rakai ?

I accidentally created a new ship; Kasuna.

[amenon]

Hmm... so is that rhetoric, or does the act literally not apply?

Smooth move, Kasa. Smooth move. Probably clued Daniel in, though. Still, Good End marches forward! Seems odd that there's no scene of Jakob and Zyanya discussing it afterwards... but maybe there isn't that much to say? I guess nobody's thinking long-term yet.

Also, 'figurative wolf-whistle'. Hee

Spoiler!

I’m sure you have some you have some very important details to share.

“No, they’ve known around Jakob since their time at the shelter.

“That can’t be right. Can’t it?”

[Jonesy]

Hmm... so is that rhetoric, or does the act literally not apply?

Literally. It specifies human children specifically, thus creating the loophole.

Smooth move, Kasa. Smooth move. Probably clued Daniel in, though.

Note that they were speaking in their language at the time, so anything Daniel overheard he wouldn't be able to understand.

Good End marches forward!

We're heading into the final act now. Wanted to tie up some loose ends first.

Spoiler!

I’m sure you have some you have some very important details to share.

“No, they’ve known around Jakob since their time at the shelter.

“That can’t be right. Can’t it?”

Ah, thanks for that.

[amenon]

Note that they were speaking in their language at the time, so anything Daniel overheard he wouldn't be able to understand.

Sure, except for the honeybuns bit and the general tone. I just think Daniel is canny in these matters, is all

Thanks for writing, as always!

[Bellhead]

That was a wonderful way to start the week! It's so nice that Rakai and Nituna are happy together. The gift from Gregory sure won't go unused, I'm sure.

"a bit of fun beneath the sheets", eh? Sounds like somebody's going to sleep pretty well tonight.

I think I'm going to have to reread this again sometime. It's just that good. Any plans for making a print copy?

[Jonesy]

That was a wonderful way to start the week! It's so nice that Rakai and Nituna are happy together. The gift from Gregory sure won't go unused, I'm sure.

"a bit of fun beneath the sheets", eh? Sounds like somebody's going to sleep pretty well tonight.

I think I'm going to have to reread this again sometime. It's just that good. Any plans for making a print copy?

Once the story's finished, I'd like to try and redo some of the earlier parts. At that point I may well look into getting it published, but I don't know how it would go if I've already got it available for free on several sites.

[FrogSteaks]

Here's hoping that Jakob and all the rest can finally do away with all the horrible acts going on with the Tholmes'. Hell if I was at that meeting, I would've happily signed that petition as well.

And of course, I wish for all the best for the new couple. After what they both have been through, they definitely deserve happiness.

Once the story's finished, I'd like to try and redo some of the earlier parts. At that point I may well look into getting it published, but I don't know how it would go if I've already got it available for free on several sites.

If you do put this story to print, you can definitely put me down as a buyer.

[Bellhead]

Once the story's finished, I'd like to try and redo some of the earlier parts. At that point I may well look into getting it published, but I don't know how it would go if I've already got it available for free on several sites.

If you do put this story to print, you can definitely put me down as a buyer.

Same here. Even if it is for free, there is still something to be said for a hard copy of a book.