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Re: The Art of War: Chapter 6 – Hysteria

#31 Post by Thallium »

Kaptain wrote:And 10000?! lolwut?
Hehe, I meant chapter 5. Allycat hadn't got there yet so i was just warning him 8)
Chapter 7 is nowhere near done yet but things are looking hopeful, you might just be in luck. Although if you really can't wait, I'll put chapter 7's name up in white text in a quote at the end of this post. As with everything I do, the chapter titles have meaning about some of the things going on in the next chapter so I'll let you speculate about what it might contain :wink:
Kaptain wrote:Wait, if you know the word count...
Believe me, I never know the word count in advance. Let me tell you something about the way I write. It's all completely spontaneous, I have the over all plot in my head and I know roughly what each chapter will contain but all the details I make up as I'm writing them. For example: Arloest was originally nothing more then a filler character that would make conversation on the trip to Sangin and then would never be seen from again. However, because I never have any plans for details like this, Arloest turned out to be a really good character and so he actually became one of the main people in chapter 5. Not bad for a filler. Anyway, that’s just how I do things which is why I can never be sure how long a chapter will be or what it will contain. Makes things a lot more fun if you ask me :D

And another thing, I am NOT doing another 10k chapter again. You might get one for the final chapter in, like, a years time or so but don't expect one before that. Chapter 5 was draining.
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Re: The Art of War: Chapter 6 – Hysteria

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- Smears Kaptain colored paint over the quote- Noooooot gonna reeeeead it. Nope. That will just invite suspense.

Thought you were talking about chapter 7 :3 But alas, it seems I am mistaken. Oh well, no rush. I was just going to hold a grudge until the day I died if you had it done and didn't post before you left. Just a lifelong grudge. Nothing big. Just a gnawing hatred. c:




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Re: The Art of War: Chapter 6 – Hysteria

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Took me a little while, but I am finally caught up! Loving the story, loving the twist, hating the cliff-hanger, but whatever.
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Re: The Art of War: Chapter 6 – Hysteria

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Just read through the story and I've really enjoyed it so far, absolutely brilliant read. Can't wait to see more! :mrgrin:
Ah, Vezax, when aren't you a [censored]. I died waay too many times on that fight with my mage (;_;)
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Only Read a few Lines but it looks good


BTW need to post so i could Read more later

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Well what a fun week I’ve had. Nothing like 6 days of waking up at 5:30 and sleeping under a sheet of plasticised fabric to really get you back in the mood to write something.

I know I said I wouldn’t but this chapter is going to be split up into two parts with the next coming out about mid-week. This is because 1) I have obviously had very limited time this week and I wanted to get something out and 2) because as stated before I do not want to do another epically long chapter (which this looked like it could have turned into).

Anyway, I hope you enjoy this part. On today’s menu is “backstory and explanations”, have a nice meal.



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Chapter 10 – The Shark and the Shadow: Part 1



It was chaos after the destruction of the Templar’s tower; all three generals dead, part of the castle destroyed and worst of all, King Adelaide missing in the field. Everything fell apart with high ranking officials and army captains each vying to fill the power vacuum left in the wake of the destruction. It was of course only several days later that the King’s survival was learned of and most of the bickering among the higher-ups ceased less their actions be interpreted as treason.

It was out of this turmoil that I saw Keiser for the first time in over seven years.

I was attending his trial as a watcher; one who observed that the course of justice was being dispensed in the proper manner by the court judges and the army law officers. As one of the senior captains in the Du’hadrin’s “Akorshakai”, it was my right to make my voice heard over any point I considered to be worthy of special consideration by the small army of junior law officers and scribes that made up the Eastern Basitin judicial system. I was about to speak up at Lieutenant Alabaster’s blatant lust for personal vengeance when Adelaide returned. There was quite the uproar I can tell you; the court went crazy (and not just because Keiser had drawn sword against the entire tribunal) and the wind was taken completely out of Alabaster’s sails (a good thing mind you). My memory of what exactly the King said is quite hazy, however I remember very well the consequences of her words: instead of being put back into exile, Keiser was being offered the chance of a lifetime. An official position as the first Basitin ambassador to the outside world. Quite the turnaround eh?



–From the autobiography of Arms General Marcus Kain, first published in 1975




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“He deserves to know.”
“Why? Why should I tell him anything? Bad enough that he knows who I am in the first place. Why should I tell him more? I should just kill him now and be done with all this.”
“Don’t be so stupid and naïve, you know that everything has a purpose, that everything is written. You think all of this happened by coincidence? Besides, it’s not like this came out of the blue. “He” did warn you something like this might happen after all.”
“And you know that “he” isn’t always right!”
“Whatever, you know what has to be done. Just don’t do anything overly stupid ok?”
“Get out of my head Jason!”

Silence.

“Who are you talking to?”
Hawk was looking at him inquisitively.
Keiser turned away, “Never you mind, it’s not important.”
But then he turned back, Jason’s words weighing down upon him. He had known this time would come eventually, everything over the last year had pointed towards it. Even “he” had known. And now here he stood in plain view. Exposed. His little charade was well and truly over. He looked back to Hawk who had been walking behind him in silence for the last hour now and was split, part of him wanting to get rid of the evidence and go back to his secret life and part wanting to finally throw off the cloak of lies and deceit he had been living under for so long now. He made a decision.

“James… wait.”
Hawk turned round, eyes hooded with tiredness but also tinged with a spark of excitement.
“I have… not been fair to you and I know what you must be thinking. Please believe me when I say that it was not without good reason that I left when I did. There were things that… I had to do.”
Hawk crossed his arms and looked Keith, the hero of the Basitin race, straight in the face
“Then tell me.”



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“I was born 92 years ago, in a district of the Eastern Basitin capitol less than a kilometre from the caste walls. All my young life I had dreamed of someday being an important officer in the military and having a chance to work in that same castle under the King. That was my life’s ambition. I admit I was never the strongest or the cleverest but I, like everyone else, had my dreams and I was determined to make them become a reality.
Until they were taken from me.
I was banished, exiled from my home and left to lead a life of the wanderer, never truly belonging anywhere until my dying day came and absolved me of my sins. But I had not reckoned without the intervention of one of the few friends I had had during my childhood.
Nickolai Alaric.
Unbeknownst to me, he had gained himself quite a considerable promotion to become Master General in just four years. How he did it I never knew. He… manipulated events to allow me to return, and when I came back he had arranged for me to become the Basitin kingdom’s first international ambassador.

My role took me far afield, from the various Keidran tribes of the west and south to even the human capitol in the east of Mekkan, all under the pretence of finally opening up Basitin society to the rest of the world. But… times changed. The world was no longer the relatively peaceful place it had been for centuries before. Skirmishes were nothing new to the Keidran and humans but a full scale war had not been waged for countless generations; occasional scuffles was as far as their hostilities got. But now the Templar were in charge. The human king assassinated and their armies taken over and merged with the almost limitless magical potential of the Templar’s own considerable forces. They were unstoppable, cutting a vast swathe through the local country side, exterminating any Keidran they found. The Templar wanted the elimination of an entire species.

Their armies could not be fought against, their armour strengthened by magic and nearly impervious to normal weapons, their very soldiers augmented my magic glyphs to become more than any normal man could be. They were totally invincible. In just a few short years the Keidran tribes had all fallen, one after the other to the Templar’s limitless grasp, their people either killed or sold into slavery for the highest bidder. There was much talk of the two Basitin kingdoms uniting and waging war in defence of the Keidran, however we soon realised that this was impossible. We had no magic, what good we could even a united Basitin army do against an enemy that was greater both in numbers and destructive capability? So, we decided to do as we had always done. We would let the world go to hell and shut ourselves away from the nightmare, hopeful that it would eventually pass and we would endure as we had always done. But that was not to be the case.

Not content with their almost total annihilation of the Keidran species, the Templar turned their eyes south towards our Island. Even then we knew that they would not stop until every last xeno was crushed beneath their iron boot. The only thing that saved us from being slaughtered just as the Keidran had was the channel between the mainland and the Basitin Isles. It was a vast stretch of water that would take almost a month for a merchant ship to cross, let alone an armoured warship of the kind employed by the human armies. This presented the humans with a problem. You see, while we Basitins are not a naturally sea-faring race, we did have quite a considerable navy that had been built up over the generations to resist just such an advance as this. The elders of long ago knew that the humans would inevitably attack one day and so they ordered its creation hundreds of years ago to ensure that the Isles remained – as they had always been – Basitin territory.

While the Templars power seemed near limitless on the ground, on the high seas it was another matter entirely. Each mage was far more powerful than any normal soldier, be he Basitin, Keidran or otherwise; however they did have one great weakness. For a mage to use his powers, he had to suck the very life essence out of the earth itself and then transfer that power into whatever he desired. If that power ran out, the mage started using his own life-force as the source of power. This limitation did not affect their armies on the ground as whole platoons of mages were used to form the relatively simple augmentation spells that empowered their soldiers to be indestructible. However, amplifying soldiers was one thing, enhancing a warship was something else entirely.

Out at sea, the Templar were cut off from their source of power and so their magic could not be used without killing the mage himself. While their ships were strengthened in the dry-docks, the amount of power required to do to a ship what they did to a soldier was astronomical and there simply weren’t the necessary supply of acolytes that could be spared to carry out the work. As a consequence, in the open water the humans were on an almost equal footing to ourselves.

This allowed us to hold them back… for a time. While we matched them in every battle we fought, their overwhelming numbers eventually forced the navy to retreat lest they be totally destroyed by the human armada. But they bought us valuable time; in fact the almost constant sea battles gave us another three years to prepare for the human’s inevitable ground assault on our home. The first since records began.

It was during this time that I came home.

Since the start of the hostilities and the closing of all diplomatic relations with the humans, I had been working with the Keidran tribes trying to negotiate deals with both their enemies and ourselves. While the King and her council refused to take any direct action against the Templar, I was able to broker an arms deal with them whereby we would send the border tribes armaments and logistical support in order to help them resist the incursion into their ancestral lands. We all knew that this would not stop the Templar but would only halt their advance; however it would buy us more time to prepare ourselves. While I’m not proud of what we did, the Keidran were a necessary delay for the human armies to beat on for a time.

As they were pushed further and further back towards the inner territories, the higher-ups made the decision to pull me and all other Basitin working in the battle zones back to the Isles since it was clear that there was nothing more we could do to help the beleaguered tribes in what was soon to become a global war. We were on the last ship out before all friendly ports were closed. Most of them for good.

In the years since the Templar’s tower had been destroyed all of the Basitin high command had been reassembled but unfortunately was still being run by men who had never set their paws outside of the city let alone the Isles to see the world. As a consequence, the people orchestrating what was clearly becoming our fight for survival had never had any experience of the humans or their armies save what was contained within our few books on the subject. It was little better than fighting blind. However, due to the extraordinary circumstances of our predicament, an action was taken that had never even been contemplated in the darkest recesses of the history of the Basitin people.

The entirety of the high command, including the King herself, resigned their posts with immediate effect.

They realised that they could not hope to save our people with their extremely limited knowledge of the foe and so they turned to the only few Basitins who had ever had prolonged contact with the Templar and so knew at least some of their ways and thought processes.
Me as an ambassador, an old friend and former Akorshakai captain—turned spy by the name of Marcus Kain, and the late General Alabaster’s deputy, a man by the name of Seethe who had been overseeing the movement of the Templar armies and executing the supply of arms to the Keidran over the past few years. Together we became the newly appointed Master, Arms and Intelligence generals respectively with overall command falling to me solely because of my contact with the former Grand Templar Trace Legacy, who had gone into hiding when the whole debacle began. The post of “King” was dissolved to allow us to take any necessary actions without having to report to an elected official. From that moment on, the Eastern Basitins were to be ruled by emergency powers. It was a sad state of affairs really: our very existence was now reliant upon three people with a combined knowledge of humans of just over twelve years. And yet we were the best we had.

It was at this time that my story as you know it really begins…”



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Suddenly Keiser trailed off, his eyes darting from Hawks face and around the alien landscape as if searching for something.
“It’s not safe here, we must move. Quickly now!”
He leapt to his paws and grabbed his kit and rifle before setting off in the direction they had been traveling before. Hawk ran to catch up
“What is it? What do you sense?”
Keiser paused
“I’m not quite sure… something I know but… it’s elusive.”
He turned back, “I promise I shall tell you everything when this is over, but know that there are some things that even I cannot explain fully. But you shall know… eventually everyone shall know.”
He pointed to a small dot on the horizon, “do you see that, at the base of one of those pinnacles?”
Hawk shaded his eyes against the glare that seemed to originate from all around them despite the lack of any discernable stars in the sky,
“A cave?”
Keiser nodded
“Yes, we should be safe there for a time. Then I can figure a way to get us out of this mess…”
Suddenly Hawk grabbed his shoulder, “Wait! I remember what happened now, back in Sangin. Tell me… was what he said true? What has happened to my friends?!”
Keiser gently removed the hand, a look of sadness crossing his face.
“I’m sorry James. I have known Orland for… too many years. He would not lie about something like that. I’m afraid your section, my Wolfpack and probably most of Sangin… are dead.”

It was a dread blow to the young corporal. Keith, Amsel and the rest of 3 section dead? The thought was incomprehensible. But he had seen the look in Keiser’s eyes and deep down he knew what he said had been true. It was like he could feel a part of him missing and yet he had only just noticed it now.
Keiser gripped the stricken soldier’s arm
“There will be time for mourning later my friend, for now we must concentrate on ourselves and how we survive lest their sacrifices be in vain.”
He steered him forward towards the pinnacle
“I promise you that Vezax will pay for what he has done. Mark my words on that. Nothing will save him from death when we find him, of that I assure you.”
And he meant it. From that moment on the two of them – the prince and the pauper – would live for one purpose only. To bear witness to the final breath of the Brethren and Betrayer and anyone else, be they human or Basitin who stood in their way.
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#37 Post by Kaptain »

No time. Cool chapter. Elaborate later. First.
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I read (and loved) this the second it was posted. It's a brilliant piece of story telling, but it's pessimistic view of the future of twokinds was very depressing (in a good way). I'll elaborate later, at prom ATM.
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Alleycat wrote:but it's pessimistic view of the future of twokinds was very depressing (in a good way).
Indeed, I’m very much a subscriber – both in real life and here – to the Warhammer 40,000 motto “In the grim darkness of the far future there is only war”. This is quite possibly because I am the world’s greatest pessimist and so why I wrote a story about an entire nation of peoples being displaced by a xeno-phobic, land-grabbing band of humans.

Anyway, you now know they “why” of the Basitin exodus (or you can probably guess at it) but you’ll just have to wait for the “how”. All I’ll say is – look out for more from Kain in the future. Lebewohl.
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Guess who's back // back again
Kaptain's back // with comments.

Hehehe...

I'll have the history hamburger with a side of backstory potato. Yes, to go.

Pretty good mate. Few people can make backstory interesting, but you get a medal for it! Yay :D


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As has already been said, very well done. Really like the new chapter so far, can't wait to see where it leads.

Also, is that another WoW reference I see?
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Jazzthren wrote:As has already been said, very well done. Really like the new chapter so far, can't wait to see where it leads.

Also, is that another WoW reference I see?
Akorshakai
Let me explain something with a brief physiological interlude:

The human mind is like a city. Take the most complicated city on Earth and then turn off all the lights while spinning in circles and then try and navigate your way out and you have a pretty good idea of why the mind is the most impenetrable aspect of biology known to science. The mind has so many different pathways and roads that many thoughts and memories can become lost amid the millions of other similar thoughts and memories in that impossibly complex city that we call the mind or the “soul”.

Now let me tell you a story. There are many aspects in this story which require me to make up names for them (e.g. the Du’hadrin) and these names can come from a variety of places. Some, like my screen name, come from the things I see around me and I think “yeah, that’ll be cool”. Others come from seemingly out of nowhere and this is where that little interlude comes in.

Let’s take the Du’hadrin shall we? It’s a name that I made up on the spot one day without any knowledge of how I came up with it. I just suddenly thought of it and it worked. Yet, somehow, I also feel like I remember that name from somewhere but I can’t explain where from. At some point in my life I must have heard that name or one quite like it and the memory of that sound has become lost in my mind, trapped in one of those countless dark and twisting streets. But then by chance a light comes on in that street and I remember the name for the briefest period of time when trying to come up with a good name. However this is enough and so hence I chose to use that name.

A similar thing happened with the Akorshakai (you will find out what it actually is eventually) whereby I was trying to think of a good name and suddenly this sound popped into my head from seemingly nowhere. Again I seemed to remember it but I couldn’t think where from. Hence I used it because it fit with what the Akorshakai are and just put it down to bit of “inspiration”.

Now of course (after a quick Google search) I remember where I heard it, many years ago while fighting through the Ramparts on my first warrior where it lodged itself in my brain, unused and useless until now.

So yes, in answer to your question that is indeed another WoW reference. A completely unintended and ridiculously obscure WoW reference (it’s part of a quote from a minor boss in a minor dungeon) that I have no idea why I specifically remember (wasn’t even a memorable boss…)

I was very bored this afternoon, hence the stupidly long Freudian spiel you have just read
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You know what makes me sad? YOU DO! How bout we chug on bown to mamby pamby land where MAYBE we can find some original names for ya, you jackwagon! ... Tissue?



Lolololol Geico.

I completely understand though. I can't count the number of characters I've named after Elder Scrolls NPCs :/
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Kaptain wrote:You know what makes me sad? YOU DO! How bout we chug on bown to mamby pamby land where MAYBE we can find some original names for ya, you jackwagon! ... Tissue?



Lolololol Geico.
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Thallium wrote:
Kaptain wrote:You know what makes me sad? YOU DO! How bout we chug on bown to mamby pamby land where MAYBE we can find some original names for ya, you jackwagon! ... Tissue?



Lolololol Geico.
Are you......high?
No sir. I have ingested a rather copius amount of sugar though. I was quoting a Geico commercial and adding my own twist to make it fit.
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