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- avwolf
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In the fourth panel for the comic for 04/14/2008, Keith states, "[T]here's not a lot of things that effect Basitins, but being wet and cold is one of them." "Effect" should be "affect." This makes the line, "[T]here's not a lot of things that affect Basitins, but being wet and cold is one of them."
In Natani's final line, she says, "I wont look if you don't, alright?" "Wont" should be "won't." The contraction is missing its apostrophe. This makes the line, "I won't look if you don't, alright?"
In Natani's final line, she says, "I wont look if you don't, alright?" "Wont" should be "won't." The contraction is missing its apostrophe. This makes the line, "I won't look if you don't, alright?"
Can't believe people missed this...
If that was a comma, weird lookin' one, huh? If so, sorry.
The M should be capitalized. Comic: http://twokinds.comicgenesis.com/d/20051017.htmlKeith wrote: I don't know, I can't get through to him. maybe you should try.
If that was a comma, weird lookin' one, huh? If so, sorry.
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For the May 21st comic, in the first panel, Keith's dialogue reads, "Hm, you you say your brother." Either there should be an ellipsis between the two "you"s or one of them should be excised, possibly replacing the first "you" with "did."
Fourth panel, Natani's dialogue starts with "Oh, don't worry. he's fine..." The 'h' on "he's" should be capitalized (or the period after "worry" should be changed to a comma).
Fourth panel, Natani's dialogue starts with "Oh, don't worry. he's fine..." The 'h' on "he's" should be capitalized (or the period after "worry" should be changed to a comma).
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I think we can blame that on the fact that she is obviously drunk when saying that.Fatalcrash wrote:Comic 20/06/2008 - Natani's line in last panel. "He took one look at us and kill himself right on the spot!"
'Kill' should be changed to 'killed'.
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Heres one i just noticed:
http://twokinds.comicgenesis.com/d/20040915.html
In the 5th panel the man says "It's just isn't normal, you know?"
and it should either be <It just isn't normal> or <It's just not normal>.
(if you broke it down from contractions it would become It is just is not normal which is too many is's)
http://twokinds.comicgenesis.com/d/20040915.html
In the 5th panel the man says "It's just isn't normal, you know?"
and it should either be <It just isn't normal> or <It's just not normal>.
(if you broke it down from contractions it would become It is just is not normal which is too many is's)
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Trace says "{I declare this keidran my mate. Now according your own laws...}"
between the "according" and the "your" there should be a "to"
Trace says "{I declare this keidran my mate. Now according your own laws...}"
between the "according" and the "your" there should be a "to"
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I FAILED KINDERGARTEN SPELLING!!!>_<
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I FAILED KINDERGARTEN SPELLING!!!>_<
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Photoshop can spell check? Whoa.
Anyway I've found a problem, it's in a reinked and recolored page.
Second panel of Twokinds Page 19:
Should be “I was attackedâ€, “he was attackedâ€, “we were attacked†or “he atta†— er, the last one doesn't really make much sense.
The original comic of 20031208 has this panel as:
Anyway I've found a problem, it's in a reinked and recolored page.
Second panel of Twokinds Page 19:
Who's attacking here? And who's being attacked?Flora: But he's... a bit of a coward. We were in a caravan when it was attacked.
Flora: He should have helped, but he ran away instead.
Should be “I was attackedâ€, “he was attackedâ€, “we were attacked†or “he atta†— er, the last one doesn't really make much sense.
The original comic of 20031208 has this panel as:
Hmm... Ephemural isn't on the cast page either...Flora: But he's a coward. He should have helped me when I was attacked by that other human.
Flora: But he ran away instead.
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"It" as in the caravan. Caravan was attacked, caravan is it. Attacker doesn't really matter. Makes more sense that way anyway, because why would he have ran away when it's just about a puny human with a sword? Even Flora could have beat him, given the right conditions.
Eh, prove me wrong, but Ephemural is in the cast page, although under the name "Master Mage" of the five Templars chosen by evil Trace. Ephemural was just undercover for own gain, and even though is a mask, never gave up the cover. So I guess Ephemural is still counted as the Master Mage by cast page? Notice how much effort I put into avoiding Ephemurals gender? : P I had the picture that it's a she, but can a mask really have a gender?
Just my opinions. I kinda want someone to prove me wrong. That way I know the truth for sure
Eh, prove me wrong, but Ephemural is in the cast page, although under the name "Master Mage" of the five Templars chosen by evil Trace. Ephemural was just undercover for own gain, and even though is a mask, never gave up the cover. So I guess Ephemural is still counted as the Master Mage by cast page? Notice how much effort I put into avoiding Ephemurals gender? : P I had the picture that it's a she, but can a mask really have a gender?
Just my opinions. I kinda want someone to prove me wrong. That way I know the truth for sure
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Comic for August 28, 2008
Second panel, there's a mispelling: it should be "Eavesdropping."
Alabaster's dialogue in the fifth panel's a little awkward too. You might want to move "personally" around in the sentence... Something like "...I've spoken with the king personally and had your trial moved up to tonight," or "...I've spoken with the king and personally had your moved up to tonight," might flow a little better.
Second panel, there's a mispelling: it should be "Eavesdropping."
Alabaster's dialogue in the fifth panel's a little awkward too. You might want to move "personally" around in the sentence... Something like "...I've spoken with the king personally and had your trial moved up to tonight," or "...I've spoken with the king and personally had your moved up to tonight," might flow a little better.
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